A fanfiction by Choas
We know not of the year. All time was discarded during the Revolution. All we know is that the rebels won. This all happened before I was born. 5 years to the date of the elimination of the old government.
The Revolution was started by one man, the one who we thought was powerless after that battle over the Leech. He fooled us all, we thought he was powerless after a great coup de grace that left his army scattered and dismayed. At first they were right. He was left powerless, his vast powers depleted. But he recovered, and his powers grew to unfathomable levels. He has been called the reincarnation of Hitler. But unlike Hitler, he had succeeded in his mass genocide. He has always believed his race was dominant. And from what he accomplished, he has unmistakably proven his belief. The lord of all that is live and dead is named………………………………………………………...….Magneto.
My father was a mighty general of Magneto’s army. I’ve never known is human name, but his mutant name is known by everyone, he’s almost infamous as Magneto himself. He is the Juggernaut. His mutant power is that he is invulnerable of the body.He could not be harmed or even feel pain. His momentum in battle made him impossible to beat physically in anyway. He could get no sickness. He did not age and he donned a helmet that made his mind invulnerable too and was created by Magneto himself. He could ricochet a rocket and be completely unharmed, but his confidence and ego grew to levels larger than Magneto’s powers. There was no surprise, he was the rebel’s hero. He had become royalty. And so had I. Magneto had no children, so my father was next in line. But he was killed in his sleep when I was 3. He had became so arrogant, that he no longer worn his helmet, and was assassinated by a member of a group to bring down Magneto. They were stopped hours after his death.
My mutant powers aren’t all that powerful. They are more convenient than anything. I have complete control of an alternate dimension that is a complete void. With a simple push or slap of my hand, I can teleport anything to the void, and it stays there till I make a backhand notion, then anything I want comes out of the vast void. I of course have many things in there, and I myself can go into the void. When in the void, if I push my way out, then I can teleport anywhere known to my knowledge. I’m a general now of the army, which basically means I do nothing all day, except boss around everyone and get a gigantic salary. I do wish for some excitement. Only if the X-Men could be resurrected somehow. But they are gone and will never come back………………………………….
9 comments:
Interesting . . . You want this hosted? You want some criticism?
Criticism? is hard to critizice fiction man cause anything can be posible.
I mean criticism of the writing, not the subject matter.
When do the Winnie the Pooh stories start?
Hey!!! Wait a minute! That post was written by Choas_Dragoon; I thought he was only going to be posting about how great the Oakland Raiders were?! Where are the Oakland Raider posts? C'mon, don't be a fairweather fan and stop from posting about the best team in the NFL just because they haven't won a regualr season game. The Raiders are AWESOME! You should be writing all about them!
Critism and hosting. And maybe ideas. And I was wrong about Oakland, they bombed hard. My favorite team was always Denver anyway.
Hosting I can do, I am setting up some fiction hosting this weekend, I will include yours.
Criticism, again, writing is not my fortes, but overall not bad. Gets a bit unclear in the middle, but your set a nice mood. I don't know if this is intentionaly, but is is written much like a comic book or a script.
BLAH!
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